Hawkheart (Breezeclan)

[jayfeatherfan]

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{Tell me about yourself}

NAME: Hawkheart
AGE: 17 moons
GENDER: She-cat
CLAN: Breezeclan
RANK: Warrior
SHORT DESCRIPTION:

[/blockquote] Brown, with black fur that makes her fur look almost feather-like, and very light grey eyes.

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LOOKS IN DETAIL:(optional) Tall and slim, many scars, but ony a few noticable ones: A long one on her flank, a short but deeper one above her eye, and a long one on her back leg
PERSONALITY: Through her hawk-like appearance, she is a really nice cat. She is nice to everyone, and would happily give her life for her clan-mates. She doesnt like being confined to camp, and prefers to have room to run, as she is a big ball of energy. Rabbits are her favorite prey, as you usually get a good chase with them.
FAMILY MEMBERS: none, but she wants kits
HISTORY:(optional)
RP SAMPLE:(needed only for first bio)

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{Behind the canvas}

SITE NAME:(optional)
HOW DID YOU FIND US?: another member
OTHER CHARACTERS: Witherkit- mistclan; Swallowpaw - medi. appr. - Skyclan; Slitherpaw - warrior appr - Marshclan; Diamond - loner
RP EXPERIENCE?:this site

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What is the Clan? Looks a little scrambled up there! The gender is blank but "she-cat" was put under Rank. (:
Fix that and it will be acceptable, although a little more added to the personality would be ideal.

[jayfeatherfan]

ahhhh it did get scrmbled!! sorry!! this must have been the one i was making when my cp froze D:

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Looks great!
ACCEPTED!

[Bear]

But it's ridiculously overdone and adds nothing to a character. It's not a good reason to turn evil, and that's not why people hate her--I'm just saying that it shouldn't be a reason to love her.